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As we sat in silence, child small,
we made shadow puppets on the wall;
and with our right hands, fingers arched,
good lord! We made a heart.
But as soon as our fingers touched,
as though preconceived, all at once,
our hands gave a jerking start;
and we each tore it half apart.

So many times it's come undone
and I've fought for love and hardly won,
but it's never, ever been much fun,
at least not half as much as breaking fingers
on a wall,
sitting in a silent hallway,
waving candles,
child small.
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Im0gene Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
I love the way you've shown the delicate beauty of childhood friendship :)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi, I'm a reader for #Elocutionists! :wave: We're dedicated to lending a voice to great DeviantART literature, and I did a spoken word cover of your piece. You can listen to it here: [link] (hit the download button).

If you like it, I'd love to add it to our group's Wordpress blog. What do you think? :)
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BananaYoyo Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
my god your writting is absolutly beautiful, keep it up! :)
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MissBlondy Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
this is beautiful, i think im gonna cry
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glen Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :) I'm glad it moved you
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is absolutely lovely, and the rhyming isnt forced at all which is just a gasp of fresh air.
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glen Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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whatpumpkins Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012   Writer
i love this. the rhymes are lovely without distracting from the piece or seeming too strained, and the concept is refreshingly unique. good work :rose:
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glen Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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ktraynor Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely imagery, lovely poem.
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