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Fall star - crash;
And shed your light in ribbons upon the dirt.
Covered in slime and shit; mutiny and greed; all sins -
a bold perturbing circle of despair.
Knee-deep, sinking through it's density,
Irate with disgust and horror,
Built upon need and disappointment,
Our shoulders bear weight -
Dear God! Even you would stumble and slip
and fall - without redemption.

It is with malice that we ache,
with hate and pain and blood,
all spilling from us, equal; as we are in our toils.
But with it all comes perseverance
And sweat; grit and will; iron clad.
Torture and want breeding need and endurance,
So that in the finality of this doomed machine -
We will drag the light of the world upon us
And unbind ourselves from Hell and suffering.
:iconglen:
We are thrown involuntarily into this world - into sin and hate - and each of us are just trying to mold the foundation of our universe so that we are, in the end, happy.
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:iconspiritunleashed:
i disagree. but i like the poem. great imagery and feelings. good job.
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:iconglen:
~glen Aug 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I appreciate the comment and please understand that I mean no disrespect to any other person's beliefs or anything like that.

My poetry is based often off of momentary moods or developments in my life so what I write in perspective one minute might change the next, although the foundations will (more than likely) stay the same. I'm not one to drastically change my views unless completely necessary and proven ignorant
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:iconspiritunleashed:
and that is perfectly fine. what works for you, works for you and i have no right to judge you or your beliefs. after all, they are illusions. why fight over illusions?

and it is great that you are constantly changing and evolving, and that your beliefs are flexible enough to withstand change. go for it.
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:iconenslavedsphinx:

It is too deep that I'm baffled; and it feels great to be astounded.
I really like that imagery that you showed.
Brilliant approach.
:+fave:
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:iconglen:
~glen Aug 5, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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:iconalwaysandnever:
i really like your word choices
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:iconglen:
~glen Aug 3, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)

Appreciate it
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:iconalwaysandnever:
you're quite welcome
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